Fic help, please!

[juliacarmen.livejournal.com]

There are a few things I need to finish the last part of my fic. Since I'm not nearly as well-read or adept at Google-fu as you lovely ppl, I thought I'd ask what you would use in these sitchs:

1. Jeeves quotes something loving/adoring to Bertie as they, um, bask in the afterglow (more like: lay in exhausted stupor). Any suggestions?

2. Bertie says: ‘You were on top of me in [an instant], still fully clothed.’ 'Two shakes of a ducks tail' is a bit long. What Bertieism / flapper slang would you use here for 'an instant'? Answered! Thanks, thebirdmachine and bertiebwriting !

3. What pet name (aside from dream-rabbit) do you think Bertie would use for Jeeves?

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[derien.livejournal.com]

1. Jeeves quotes something loving/adoring to Bertie as they, um, bask in the afterglow (more like: lay in exhausted stupor). Any suggestions?


I suck with poetry, but you might find something in "Leaves of Grass" by Walt Whitman: http://emotionalliteracyeducation.com/classic_books_online/lvgrs10.htm

3. What pet name (aside from dream-rabbit) do you think Bertie would use for Jeeves?


Personally I think "dream rabbit" is right out. :)

I think I had him use something like "my Paragon," and I could see him using something a little over the top with Greek connotations, like "my Adonis" or "the Damon to my Pythias" as he always refers to Jeeves as a paragon and a bronzed Adonis in the stories. I still insist that he would call someone "Darling," I'm absolutely positive he does in one of the stories.

[juliacarmen.livejournal.com]

> "Darling," I'm absolutely positive he does in one of the stories.

He does? Do you have any ideas about which story that was? I'm due for another re-reading of J&W, and would love to start with that story!

I think Adonis is perfect, thanks!

I've managed to avoid using quotations by having Jeeves whisper "You are the epitome of perfection, my love." Don't like it, but I couldn't find anything to slip between the " ". I think I should read Leaves of Grass just for the enjoyment of it, though. I fell in love with Constantine Cavafy while researching for this fic, though I never used his poems. Came within an ace of using this one, though: http://cavafis.compupress.gr/kave_45.htm Am babbling. Thanks for the Whitman link!