Fic help, please!

[juliacarmen.livejournal.com]

There are a few things I need to finish the last part of my fic. Since I'm not nearly as well-read or adept at Google-fu as you lovely ppl, I thought I'd ask what you would use in these sitchs:

1. Jeeves quotes something loving/adoring to Bertie as they, um, bask in the afterglow (more like: lay in exhausted stupor). Any suggestions?

2. Bertie says: ‘You were on top of me in [an instant], still fully clothed.’ 'Two shakes of a ducks tail' is a bit long. What Bertieism / flapper slang would you use here for 'an instant'? Answered! Thanks, thebirdmachine and bertiebwriting !

3. What pet name (aside from dream-rabbit) do you think Bertie would use for Jeeves?

Comments

[brewsternorth.livejournal.com]

"Two shakes" would be an acceptable abbreviation of your slightly-long expression.

Or you could say "in the t. of an e."

[storyfan.livejournal.com]

1. How about "my love" or "beloved."

[princesshannah4.livejournal.com]

I'm thinking "old top" for #3 for some odd reason...

[closetofheroes.livejournal.com]

I'd do 'in a flash'. I associate 'in a jiffy' with something more practical, such as 'I'll be there in a jiffy' or 'I'll have it for you in a jiffy', rather than just indicating speed of movement.

I don't think Bertie would actually say 'dream rabbit'. But having said that, I have nothing else to suggest.

[georgeodowd.livejournal.com]

Oh goodness me, I don't even have any decent suggestions. I just want to know where your icon is from! I am looking for art very much in that vein for my walls, and I was wondering if it's from a painting or some such. Thanks much!

for #1

[seularen.livejournal.com]

Here's a bit from Percy Bysshe Shelley. I'm quoting the whole thing so you know the context.

The day passed thus: at night, methought in dream
A shape of speechless beauty did appear:
It stood like light on a careering stream
Of golden clouds which shook the atmosphere;--
A winged youth, his radiant brow did wear
The Morning Star: a wild dissolving bliss
Over my frame he breathed, approaching near,
And bent his eyes of kindling tenderness
Near mine, and on my lips impressed a lingering kiss,--

(XLII, The Revolt of Islam)

It just super reminds me of something Jeeves would associate with Bertie. Donno how quotable it is, though.

[seularen.livejournal.com]

Also, everyone and their mother uses Spinoza in their fic, but this is a really great line:

“All happiness or unhappiness solely depends upon the quality of the object to which we are attached by love.”

Perfect for Jeeves and Bertie.

[derien.livejournal.com]

1. Jeeves quotes something loving/adoring to Bertie as they, um, bask in the afterglow (more like: lay in exhausted stupor). Any suggestions?


I suck with poetry, but you might find something in "Leaves of Grass" by Walt Whitman: http://emotionalliteracyeducation.com/classic_books_online/lvgrs10.htm

3. What pet name (aside from dream-rabbit) do you think Bertie would use for Jeeves?


Personally I think "dream rabbit" is right out. :)

I think I had him use something like "my Paragon," and I could see him using something a little over the top with Greek connotations, like "my Adonis" or "the Damon to my Pythias" as he always refers to Jeeves as a paragon and a bronzed Adonis in the stories. I still insist that he would call someone "Darling," I'm absolutely positive he does in one of the stories.

[amethystaura.livejournal.com]

It may be a bit of a corny suggestion, but what I'm saying is primarily a nickname for the most intimate of moments. If it's Bertie frigging Jeeves, Bertie could call Jeeves something along the lines of a cocoon.

[amethystaura.livejournal.com]

Ok, lemme explain. Basically Bertie's inside Jeeves & Jeeves feels wonderful around him, hence the 'cocoon'. :->