Beta Request

[elliemorris.livejournal.com]

Hello guys, I'm writing two Jeeves and Wooster fics at once (not even the murder mystery one that I started planning yet, as I'm stuck on plotting that one too) and I'm rather stumped.
I've got certain scenes from both fics written down, but I'm not sure how to progress with the rest of the story around it. I've got plenty of ideas but I just can't progress right now. Not only that, but I need some help with Bertie's voice.

Could somebody please read through what I've got and beta Bertie's narrative voice? I'll tell you the plot also, and see if it's any good or needs tweaking.
For now I've got a Jeeves-Blandings cross-over where a feud between Bertie and the Efficient Baxter should be taking place, and a romance scene between Bertie and Jeeves.
The second fic is a Bertie/Rocky and how they first met, but I also need help with the American-isms for Rocky. I'm not really sure how to write his dialogue.

Thanks if anybody's willing to help!

Comments

[derien.livejournal.com]

I think I could get my brain around it. Rocky is one of my favorites. :)

[elliemorris.livejournal.com]

Thanks! That's great. I'll PM you what I've got so far, if that's okay. :)

[derien.livejournal.com]

I haven't gotten started on reading that, yet, but found that I can't send back to you through LJ's messaging system. It gives an error saying that you have engaged some privacy options. Possibly I can't message you unless you have me friended?

http://www.gutenberg.org/files/8164/8164-h/8164-h.htm

[derien.livejournal.com]

Ah, shoot, I meant to say what that link was about - a link to the book on Gutenberg which has "The Aunt and the Sluggard" in it.

[elliemorris.livejournal.com]

I've had that problem before with another person on LJ. If I friend you, I think it will solve the problem.
Thanks for the link! I've been needing something to read for ages, and this is top of my list. :)