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Fic help, please!
There are a few things I need to finish the last part of my fic. Since I'm not nearly as well-read or adept at Google-fu as you lovely ppl, I thought I'd ask what you would use in these sitchs:
1. Jeeves quotes something loving/adoring to Bertie as they, um, bask in the afterglow (more like: lay in exhausted stupor). Any suggestions?
2.Bertie says: ‘You were on top of me in [an instant], still fully clothed.’ 'Two shakes of a ducks tail' is a bit long. What Bertieism / flapper slang would you use here for 'an instant'? Answered! Thanks,
thebirdmachine and
bertiebwriting !
3. What pet name (aside from dream-rabbit) do you think Bertie would use for Jeeves?
1. Jeeves quotes something loving/adoring to Bertie as they, um, bask in the afterglow (more like: lay in exhausted stupor). Any suggestions?
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3. What pet name (aside from dream-rabbit) do you think Bertie would use for Jeeves?
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Or you could say "in the t. of an e."
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"in the t. of an e."
t= ?
e= ?
Elaborate for the kids in the mentally negligible seats, please?
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Sounds a bit more Bertie-ish when you shorten it to just the letters, was my thinking.
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*grin* Bertie-ish, indeed.
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I don't think Bertie would actually say 'dream rabbit'. But having said that, I have nothing else to suggest.
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for #1
The day passed thus: at night, methought in dream
A shape of speechless beauty did appear:
It stood like light on a careering stream
Of golden clouds which shook the atmosphere;--
A winged youth, his radiant brow did wear
The Morning Star: a wild dissolving bliss
Over my frame he breathed, approaching near,
And bent his eyes of kindling tenderness
Near mine, and on my lips impressed a lingering kiss,--
(XLII, The Revolt of Islam)
It just super reminds me of something Jeeves would associate with Bertie. Donno how quotable it is, though.
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“All happiness or unhappiness solely depends upon the quality of the object to which we are attached by love.”
Perfect for Jeeves and Bertie.
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I suck with poetry, but you might find something in "Leaves of Grass" by Walt Whitman: http://emotionalliteracyeducation.com/classic_books_online/lvgrs10.htm
3. What pet name (aside from dream-rabbit) do you think Bertie would use for Jeeves?
Personally I think "dream rabbit" is right out. :)
I think I had him use something like "my Paragon," and I could see him using something a little over the top with Greek connotations, like "my Adonis" or "the Damon to my Pythias" as he always refers to Jeeves as a paragon and a bronzed Adonis in the stories. I still insist that he would call someone "Darling," I'm absolutely positive he does in one of the stories.
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He does? Do you have any ideas about which story that was? I'm due for another re-reading of J&W, and would love to start with that story!
I think Adonis is perfect, thanks!
I've managed to avoid using quotations by having Jeeves whisper "You are the epitome of perfection, my love." Don't like it, but I couldn't find anything to slip between the " ". I think I should read Leaves of Grass just for the enjoyment of it, though. I fell in love with Constantine Cavafy while researching for this fic, though I never used his poems. Came within an ace of using this one, though: http://cavafis.compupress.gr/kave_45.htm Am babbling. Thanks for the Whitman link!
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