ext_73597 ([identity profile] juliacarmen.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] indeedsir_backup2009-05-06 08:33 am
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Fic help, please!

There are a few things I need to finish the last part of my fic. Since I'm not nearly as well-read or adept at Google-fu as you lovely ppl, I thought I'd ask what you would use in these sitchs:

1. Jeeves quotes something loving/adoring to Bertie as they, um, bask in the afterglow (more like: lay in exhausted stupor). Any suggestions?

2. Bertie says: ‘You were on top of me in [an instant], still fully clothed.’ 'Two shakes of a ducks tail' is a bit long. What Bertieism / flapper slang would you use here for 'an instant'? Answered! Thanks, [livejournal.com profile] thebirdmachine and [livejournal.com profile] bertiebwriting !

3. What pet name (aside from dream-rabbit) do you think Bertie would use for Jeeves?
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[identity profile] brewsternorth.livejournal.com 2009-05-06 04:20 pm (UTC)(link)
"Two shakes" would be an acceptable abbreviation of your slightly-long expression.

Or you could say "in the t. of an e."

[identity profile] storyfan.livejournal.com 2009-05-06 09:32 pm (UTC)(link)
1. How about "my love" or "beloved."

[identity profile] princesshannah4.livejournal.com 2009-05-07 01:23 am (UTC)(link)
I'm thinking "old top" for #3 for some odd reason...

[identity profile] closetofheroes.livejournal.com 2009-05-07 04:19 am (UTC)(link)
I'd do 'in a flash'. I associate 'in a jiffy' with something more practical, such as 'I'll be there in a jiffy' or 'I'll have it for you in a jiffy', rather than just indicating speed of movement.

I don't think Bertie would actually say 'dream rabbit'. But having said that, I have nothing else to suggest.

[identity profile] georgeodowd.livejournal.com 2009-05-07 04:54 am (UTC)(link)
Oh goodness me, I don't even have any decent suggestions. I just want to know where your icon is from! I am looking for art very much in that vein for my walls, and I was wondering if it's from a painting or some such. Thanks much!

for #1

[identity profile] seularen.livejournal.com 2009-05-07 08:39 am (UTC)(link)
Here's a bit from Percy Bysshe Shelley. I'm quoting the whole thing so you know the context.

The day passed thus: at night, methought in dream
A shape of speechless beauty did appear:
It stood like light on a careering stream
Of golden clouds which shook the atmosphere;--
A winged youth, his radiant brow did wear
The Morning Star: a wild dissolving bliss
Over my frame he breathed, approaching near,
And bent his eyes of kindling tenderness
Near mine, and on my lips impressed a lingering kiss,--

(XLII, The Revolt of Islam)

It just super reminds me of something Jeeves would associate with Bertie. Donno how quotable it is, though.

[identity profile] seularen.livejournal.com 2009-05-07 08:53 am (UTC)(link)
Also, everyone and their mother uses Spinoza in their fic, but this is a really great line:

“All happiness or unhappiness solely depends upon the quality of the object to which we are attached by love.”

Perfect for Jeeves and Bertie.
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[identity profile] derien.livejournal.com 2009-05-07 10:40 am (UTC)(link)
1. Jeeves quotes something loving/adoring to Bertie as they, um, bask in the afterglow (more like: lay in exhausted stupor). Any suggestions?


I suck with poetry, but you might find something in "Leaves of Grass" by Walt Whitman: http://emotionalliteracyeducation.com/classic_books_online/lvgrs10.htm

3. What pet name (aside from dream-rabbit) do you think Bertie would use for Jeeves?


Personally I think "dream rabbit" is right out. :)

I think I had him use something like "my Paragon," and I could see him using something a little over the top with Greek connotations, like "my Adonis" or "the Damon to my Pythias" as he always refers to Jeeves as a paragon and a bronzed Adonis in the stories. I still insist that he would call someone "Darling," I'm absolutely positive he does in one of the stories.

[identity profile] amethystaura.livejournal.com 2009-05-07 03:29 pm (UTC)(link)
It may be a bit of a corny suggestion, but what I'm saying is primarily a nickname for the most intimate of moments. If it's Bertie frigging Jeeves, Bertie could call Jeeves something along the lines of a cocoon.

[identity profile] amethystaura.livejournal.com 2009-05-11 03:19 pm (UTC)(link)
Ok, lemme explain. Basically Bertie's inside Jeeves & Jeeves feels wonderful around him, hence the 'cocoon'. :->