I do have praise for this one, but also what could be viewed as unsatisfied complains?More like opinions, really, these: "and I do have my pride", "I had entered into the life of the man that I felt was destined to become my mate." ">particularly the sense of hearing and the sense of smell.” don't sound very Jeevesian, at least not fully; the first because it is a quick affirmation, almost as if he didn't believe it, something like "And my pride, like their arrogance, has always been firmly in place" would be more befitting, and the second one starts good, but I doubt Jeeves "felt destined" to anything, perhaps "I had entered into the life of the man I so had desired." or a tiny change that would make the meaning more Jeevesian, "I had entered into the life of the man that I now felt should become my mate.", implying that he had a mind to -make sure- of it, like Jeeves does. And the third conveys the meaning well, but Jeeves speaks differently, "The senses of hearing and smelling, Sir, appear to be particularly proficient in stirring one's memory".

These are all IMHO.

The rest is praise, as usual, The bit of Bertie sticking his nose on Jeeves' collar is just so very Wodehousean, lol, and Jeeves' inner speech is marvelous, you did capture really well that sense of "Good lord, I was just about to remember something but now it's gone", it is such a faint sentiment that it's marvelous it came through so well, without the following explanation, it was perfectly understandable, You describe Bertie's expressions very well, btw.