**PEDANT ALERT: 'it’s' should be 'its' in the first paragraph. Just my being lame, you'll humour a dying man.**
Now, on to the streams of praise...
Effeminent New York Gangster Bertie! :D
The language in this is very beautiful. Con't really explain it better than that, but you have a way with words.
This is something I shall certainly be looking out for in future. :) A very interesting story line and a very interesting beginning. I hope you won't keep us waiting too long in between posts. ^_^