ext_73597 ([identity profile] juliacarmen.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] indeedsir_backup2009-05-06 08:33 am
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Fic help, please!

There are a few things I need to finish the last part of my fic. Since I'm not nearly as well-read or adept at Google-fu as you lovely ppl, I thought I'd ask what you would use in these sitchs:

1. Jeeves quotes something loving/adoring to Bertie as they, um, bask in the afterglow (more like: lay in exhausted stupor). Any suggestions?

2. Bertie says: ‘You were on top of me in [an instant], still fully clothed.’ 'Two shakes of a ducks tail' is a bit long. What Bertieism / flapper slang would you use here for 'an instant'? Answered! Thanks, [livejournal.com profile] thebirdmachine and [livejournal.com profile] bertiebwriting !

3. What pet name (aside from dream-rabbit) do you think Bertie would use for Jeeves?
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[identity profile] brewsternorth.livejournal.com 2009-05-06 04:20 pm (UTC)(link)
"Two shakes" would be an acceptable abbreviation of your slightly-long expression.

Or you could say "in the t. of an e."
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[identity profile] random-nexus.livejournal.com 2009-05-06 04:48 pm (UTC)(link)
Sorry, I'm slow today.
"in the t. of an e."

t= ?
e= ?

Elaborate for the kids in the mentally negligible seats, please?
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[identity profile] brewsternorth.livejournal.com 2009-05-06 04:52 pm (UTC)(link)
"twinkling of an eye".

Sounds a bit more Bertie-ish when you shorten it to just the letters, was my thinking.
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[identity profile] random-nexus.livejournal.com 2009-05-06 05:52 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh! No, it's great, I'm just having a dopey day, I guess.
*grin* Bertie-ish, indeed.
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[identity profile] derien.livejournal.com 2009-05-07 10:26 am (UTC)(link)
Don't forget, though, that in canon he always establishes what the shortened letters will stand for a line or two before using them, unless they're very inferable from context ("I sat down to breakfast, and over the b. and e..." "Jeeves handed my my drink, and while contemplating the g. and t....")
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[identity profile] random-nexus.livejournal.com 2009-05-07 04:49 pm (UTC)(link)
True, indeed.