ext_28110 ([identity profile] alex51324.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] indeedsir_backup 2007-10-05 02:27 am (UTC)

I think this is a great idea--I haven't written anything in the Jeeves and Wooster universe yet, but I'd like to try my hand.

However, I think that both this post and the challenge posts on the Nexus thingy are just the teensiest bit hard to understand. I think I've worked out what you mean in each one, but it took a rather longish time to puzzle them out. You have a lot of digressions and explanations that aren't really essential to a person who just wants to know what the challenge is. Maybe you should revise each post so that there's a first paragraph that gives that information, as simply as possible--and then you can follow up with the explanations and musings for those who are interested in them. Sorry to be a butter-inner, but as a writing teacher I couldn't quite stop myself.

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