Beta needed

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I have a four pages, 1, 752 word story that I need a beta for. It's G rated. The story is based on events from Extricating Young Gussie, and The Aunt and The Sluggard. It has a little angst, but I don't think there is anything in it that requires a warning. I need someone to tell me if the story is good enough to be worth posting, if it needs more detail anywhere, and if it will make sense to people that are only slightly familiar with the events in The Aunt and The Sluggard. I also need my punctuation checked. Any errors pointed out, advice, or suggestions are always appreciated.